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You know, I had a thought today… I'm a writer.
See, I'm done with school so I'm not a student anymore. I don't have a job but I am writing freelance articles for two community magazines, and today the editor of one called me and said that it could be interesting for me to write a column with film critics. So, I don't have a job, I stay at home all day but people are paying me to write. It might not be a lot of money, and definitely it isn't a salary or anything like that, but people are playing me to write, hence, I'm a writer. *beams*
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Also, I put my name in The Great Writer Meme, so go for it and give me some concrit, please? ^_^
Have a great day, everyone.
See, I'm done with school so I'm not a student anymore. I don't have a job but I am writing freelance articles for two community magazines, and today the editor of one called me and said that it could be interesting for me to write a column with film critics. So, I don't have a job, I stay at home all day but people are paying me to write. It might not be a lot of money, and definitely it isn't a salary or anything like that, but people are playing me to write, hence, I'm a writer. *beams*
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Also, I put my name in The Great Writer Meme, so go for it and give me some concrit, please? ^_^
Have a great day, everyone.
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Date: 2006-02-23 08:45 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-02-23 09:02 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-02-23 11:20 pm (UTC)I've started at the top and will work my way down the list of stories, kay? I'm also not trying to be nasty with any of these comments..they are not intended to insult or aggravate you, they are comments on words - not you! I've had to cut it in half as I went over the word count for LJ. *grumble*
This is where I look back
Yes, that’s the question on everyone’s mind; how did I become a Gundam pilot?
--> good question, good hook, a little abrupt if this is a letter...they usually start with a heading. It is initially unclear who's comments or thoughts these are ;-)
Instead I’m going to dedicate the next two hours to do this for you… see how much I love you?
--> this is where we figure out it is probably Q.
But before we start, let me tell you that I’m not so sure of my writing skills. I know you think that this is something new that we can do and you know I’m up for it but I’m no Dostoyevsky so don’t expect too much from me. Well, here it goes…
--> he's also been trained to run a company, which would include reading a lot of letters, as well as writing them (I used to be office manager). A different type of letter, I'll grant you, but his writing skills as such should be good – he can form coherent sentences and spell correctly, I assume! ;-)
When I was growing up I was a real brat.
--> that I can so see!
I concede, they weren’t the nicest friends but I didn’t know any better.
--> I concede that they weren't the nicest (of) friends? Not quite sure there, english is my joint first language, it just doesn't quite flow
They were all rich kids, just like me, but even though we had so many things in common, I always felt that there was an invisible wall between us that I couldn’t cross. We were never close and now I know it was for the best. After the war ended, and I returned to L4, I met with some of them. I remember sitting at the club bar, surrounded by four of my former friends and silently hoping that the alcohol would kick in to enable me to endure the torture they were putting me though.
-->Snicker. Been there, done that. Well, minus the war part.
I know what you are thinking, Duo; I can just picture you snickering about the thought of me drinking. Well let me assure you of two things. Firstly, I was only drinking wine. I said I would never again drink a 'cocktail’ made of solely Vodka and Tequila and I stick by it.
-->good for him, that would taste disgusting!
And secondly, that wasn’t my first time drinking - you were kind enough to share that experience with me, and now I know what too much alcohol can do to me, so I only drank a couple of cups.
--> Glasses, not cups. Cups are what you drink coffee out, glasses are clear and you drink wine out of them (or in some countries, tea, but then they look like coffee cups)
You may think this is weird, Duo, but the truth is that my father and I never really talked so we were actually back to normal.
--> Poor Q! Every dad should pay at least some attention to their kids.
The first thing I noticed when I entered the house was that I wasn’t suddenly assaulted by ten big sisters who felt overprotective of their little brother. However I didn’t have much time to think about that since Armando, the butler, informed me that there was a doctor waiting in my room and that my father had instructed that I see him immediately.
After I landed, I had been thinking about so many things that I had forgotten about my injuries. I had been hit by a bullet before the mobile suit battle.
--> err..the way it sounds is that he ran away, met up with Rashid et al, and returned via the shuttle after a battle in which he got wounded...no years in between?
LOL, my dad would have been livid if I'd run away, let alone got hurt!
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Date: 2006-02-23 11:20 pm (UTC)“Violence was needed then, Father. I don’t support it but I think that sitting back and expecting others to fight for me is hypocritical and cowardly.”
--> ouch!
He looked at me for a moment before he slapped me. That was the first and only time my father did that and I don’t think it was because I interrupted him, but because of my words. Pacifism has always been the ideal defended by my family and I think that when my father heard his son defending another view, he felt betrayed.
--> cause slapping is soooo pacifistic. Bastard.
for me, sleeping always wins.
--> yep, me too. Minus the running bit. Sleeping wins.
I’m sure you know what happened next, at least the training part; I’m sure it wasn’t that different from what G taught you. If you think about it we were the only ones who needed a crash soldier course.
--> snicker, love the idea of a 'chrash soldier course'.
“I think we would be more comfortable in the living room, Father,”
--> oh so politely getting his way ;-)
“Father I’m leaving,” Go straight to the point. This gives you leverage against your opponent. Not taking the time to make small talk gives you an air of superiority. “The situation in the colonies is only getting worst and I plan to do something about it.” Inform first, explain later.
“And how do you plan to do this?” Be condescending but be sure to talk down to your opponent; his resolve will crumble or he will let the anger take control of him.
--> love the analysis of the conversation in these and the next few paragraphs! That's fantastic!
Duo, thanks for reminding me what’s truly important. You’ve always been there for me and I can tell you that having friends like you makes me happy I chose this path. I wouldn’t change a thing. This is where I look back and smile, it’s been worth it.
--> Devious Duo there, nicely done!
Like the whole fic, it's kind of sweet. As I said, I know it sounds like i've been harsh, but I was really nitpicking there, and being finickity at it. Overall it's nice to see the 'other' more private side of Q, and what he thinks.
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Date: 2006-02-24 12:58 am (UTC)You are really reading all I have a lot of fics. If you are reading in order, hopefully, you'll find some progress because they are posted in the order I wrote them.
You are right about the header but it kind of wrote itself that way... *grins*
And we agree about Quatre's writing skills, I just think that he would be modest about them. He's Quatre, after all. However, if I were writing that fic today I would probably ignore that part.
--> Glasses, not cups. Cups are what you drink coffee out, glasses are clear and you drink wine out of them (or in some countries, tea, but then they look like coffee cups)
Yep, my mistake.
--> err..the way it sounds is that he ran away, met up with Rashid et al, and returned via the shuttle after a battle in which he got wounded...no years in between?
*blinks* I'm not following here. I wrote it as if Quatre returned after the battle after he met with Rashid. Actually, I just took that from his Episode Zero. Quatre meets Rashid, wins the battle and goes back home. Later, H arrives there and Quatre finds him a place to build the Gundam (I rewrote that differently, that's why the fic is canon AU *winks*).
--> cause slapping is soooo pacifistic. Bastard.
In my mind, Quatre's dad beat himself about that for a long time.
--> love the analysis of the conversation in these and the next few paragraphs! That's fantastic!
Thank you! I'm actually rather proud of that.
I'm glad that you liked the fic, and you weren't harsh. All your comments were right and to the point. Thank you so very much for taking the time to do this. *hugs*
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Date: 2006-02-24 06:09 pm (UTC)Cheers!
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Date: 2006-02-24 07:04 pm (UTC)Thank you so much for doing this. I really appreciate it.
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Date: 2006-02-23 09:20 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-02-23 09:25 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-02-23 10:14 pm (UTC)You ARE a writer. *smiles* You have been for a very long time in my mind.
I might go put my own name down in that concrit thing. *grins* If I comment on yours you'll pick me even anonymously with all the red I put over your fics, so I might just leave at the beta reading. You know my thoughts on the subject already. Is that okay?
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Date: 2006-02-23 10:20 pm (UTC)And of course is ok. You beta for me, so you are my concrit person. *glomps*
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Date: 2006-02-24 12:17 am (UTC)Anyway, congratulations!
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Date: 2006-02-24 12:59 am (UTC)Thank you!
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Date: 2006-02-24 12:34 am (UTC)^____^
Yay! That's ideal, ne? Doing something you like...at home...and get paid!!! Good for you.
And I think you know my thoughts on your fics already. They're awesome!
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Date: 2006-02-24 01:00 am (UTC)I'm so glad that you like my fics! *glomps* Thank you!