The plot proceeds at a terrific pace. Dare I guess who just popped in waving machine guns? (I can see her doing it too):)

I like the details you are giving about the kidnappers as well. Little things that make them more than faceless demons.

Just a tiny, picky point - Heero opened the door and exited the vehicle as soon as Duo hit the breaks. It's "brakes" on a car.